The less editing required the faster it gets approved. Looking at your story, if you want it published faster, you need to make sure that each new speaker starts a new line.
Amanda screamed “Are you going to **** me again?” He said “****? I never ***** you, I gave you what you wanted but I don’t like sharing. I’m not meant to be here but we aren’t done. Besides I’m yet to break your ass in.” He said in his baritone voice as he towered over Amanda looking around and noticing the black dildo in the distance, still pulsating. She leaned over and touched his arms saying “I want both you and Tyrone to break me my ass in” she said with a nervous look. “I can’t deny my physiological responses to strong black men especially the ones that take control of me.” She conceded to Jamal.
Should be:
Amanda screamed “Are you going to **** me again?”
He said “****? I never ***** you, I gave you what you wanted but I don’t like sharing. I’m not meant to be here but we aren’t done. Besides I’m yet to break your ass in.”
He towered over Amanda looking around and noticing the black dildo in the distance, still pulsating. She leaned over and touched his arms. “I want both you and Tyrone to break me my ass in.” she said with a nervous look. “I can’t deny my physiological responses to strong black men, especially the ones that take control of me.”
Avoid stating that someone said something once at the beginning and once at the end of a sentence. Once is enough. Make sure that you use punctuation at the end of a sentence, even if that sentence is in quotes.