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City of Desires

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LindaBlacklove
Pros: Well-written. The prose is good and flows well. Descriptions are very sexy and exciting. Build up is flawless.
Cons: Sex is very quick. It looks like Darius cums in three minjutes.
Yes, the husband should know and eventually accept his place under the real Real Man, the real Master of the house/******. He does not have to be now "right now". However, he also deserves his journey into acceptance.
There are no bad parts in this story. However, the part that is "less good" is the actual sex. The story buulds so much momento on the script, that I felt very underwhelmed. The sex does not need 20 pages. However, it's frustrating when the author spends so much attention building up to the fuck... just finish the entire fuck itseld in two meager paragraphs or little nore.

This story does not need 15 chapters or more. It only needs a couple more. Keep it simple-keep it sweed.
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Nike
Pros: I love the way you write, you have talent, keep going like this!
Maybe she should tell him, maybe he'll be a bit against it at first but in the end he must accept the fact that they are meant for each other (sexually speaking). Just an idea of course, I'm sure you'll do great ☺️ (sorry for my weird English I'm still learning as self-taught)
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