I gave it high marks for the creativity of the story, but lowered for it's execution. The main charcater's ****** was introduced, then they play no real role in the story. It mostly involves a completely different group of girls.
On a technical side, you had a few awkward time jumps. The setting/scene seemed to change without a cursory 'Then a few days later when ..." type of a line to kick off the next paragraph.
I read it because I was hoping that the main character would get treated cruelly and humiliated, and he was. But on the quality side, I think a bit of pruning and polishing could make it a lot better.